[quote]I STILL NEED FEEDBACK. [/quote] This is actually a part 2 to the other post i made, with the camp and the.... ugh.... cat girls.... I flew my ship past mountains and trees. I sat in a small cøckpit, silent. The only sound was the rain on the windshields, and the quiet hum of the engines. The ship’s automated voice broke the silence; <Approaching coastline in 3 minutes>. I tracked the leader of that gang to a sunken freighter, a 2 miles off the coast. The ship consisted of the cøckpit and a compartment with a bed and workbench. On the workbench was a machine gun. The gun was decked out with a chainsaw made of hard light, a flamethrower and bullets that turned the blood into toxic liquid. If the bullets drew blood, the target would die, even if they got away- no matter what the target was. I also bought a collapsible mod from the kings forge and managed to actually implant it into my body. So I’m basically the ant man of Offtopic, but i can only shrink and return to normal. I landed the ship on the beach and dived into the water. The coast was rich with sealife, the ship could be seen in the distance. I entered the freighter through a hole in it’s hull, in the front. Inside was a cargo hold, with large crates and even fish swimming around. The ship was creaking. On the far side of the room was a large door. The leader’s signal was coming from the other side. I pressed a button next to the door, it opened with a loud scrapping sound and I entered into a corridor. As the door closed, water began draining through drains on the floor. “So the ship is kinda functional.” As I walked through the corridor and past doorways the signal became stronger. It led me to what looked like crew quarters. He was on one of the bed tinkering with a sword. A machine gun materialized in my hand. “Hey dude!” I startled him. “You again?! Goddammit. What do you want of me?!” “I was sent to your camp with orders to assassinate you. I’m finishing the job.” “You’ll never kill all of us.” “I won’t have to. You’re killing yourselves.” He charged me and attempted an uppercut attack, but a chainsaw appeared on my gun and blocked his attack. I kicked him in the leg, and he stumbled back. But let down his guard. I gave him a few punches untill he knocked me off my feet and attempted to stab me through the chest. I barely rolled but the sword caught my arm and cut it (not off, just drew a bit of blood). He then attempted to behead me i shrunk and appeared behind him. I fired a few rounds into him, nearly killing him. He looked up at me, “Well? Aren’t you gonna kill me?” “No. I think I’ll let the bullets do that. You’ll be able to reflect on your past choices.” I left him on the ship to die. The remnants of his gang were soon arrested and are now in prison. I also found that crystal on the way out. [quote]i know it still has some rough spots. But I’m working on it, ok?[/quote] Edit: on trending. That’s nice, i guess.